I normally write songs for guitar, but I thought I would start writing some poetry as I enjoy just writing about things. Now I know it is not very good but it is my first try ever...

I sit here in my silence
half my body shadowed
the cold floor stinging
I hold my knees tight
I shake

I sit here in my silence
locked in a room of loneliness
consuming me
scaring me
killing me

I sit here in my silence
but something shines through
soaking up my shadow
warming up my soul
a ray of hope

I stand here in her brightness

i think that's actually quite good. would love to read some of the songs you've written - seems you have a talent

Thanks for the compliments!

I won't ever post a song until it is totally polished, sorry its just if I posted all the songs I wrote it would just be a huge bunch of crap. It takes a while for me to finish a song because I have finished one yet. Poetry can be more open and less fixed so it's easier...

In the meantime I'll carry on writing.

that's cool, but you must definitely post one when you have it 'right', mr. perfection

looking forward to more

Okay well then I will post a song, but give me a couple weeks when I am on holiday and got more time...

I'll post some more poetry soon just need to get some inspiration, talking to people and looking at pictures and photo's usually helps...

Hey Domnus

nice poem mate Its really good...for some or other reason I related to it instantly! lol.

But yeah, keep it up

Thanks dee. Here is another one, no where near the level of the first one but I am just doing it for practice.

music pounding
chatter resounding
alcohol consumed
chatter resumed

faces painted thick
hiding from reality
emotionless dancing
shadowing fears

more alcohol
more dancing
more chatting
more fear

but when the music fades
they all go home
and lie in bed alone
realizing the blind reality

Anyone know what I'm talking about?

Well, I suppose poetry is open to interpretation, but to me you talking about, the feeling of lack of accomplishment after you have trashed yourself after a party/night-out...

As I said, my interpretation!

But domnus, I think you got a very unique form of poetry going on here, its something that many of us can nowdays relate to I like it, keep it up

Well it's often when people go out to clubs and just get trashed and pretend to be enjoying themselves to cover up their insecurities and when they go home they realise they didn't really do anything. So you were right!

It used to happen to me, and a lot of these SA "clubs" who shouldn't be allowed to be called clubs are just that type of environment, it's quite hard to meet people, but I am not saying it can't be fun. I tend to prefer chill lounge/beat bar type of places where there is more socialization oppurtinities...

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Noosh!!!
Good stuff man!

Please write me a song? Ill put music to it, record it (if I can) and send it back to you?!?!!

I have been dying to do my own songs, but I find writing lyrics impossible.

Been long time since my last post but anyway.

Gitano, the problem with writing lyrics to songs is that its on going process. You're constantly mixing and matching the music to the lyrics and the lyrics are usually inspired through the song which is inturned inspired by a thought and modled that way.