This is a story of a school student's mysterious life in a dimension of Hatred, mistrust and confusion.

SILPH STARR




They quickly planted the demo-ignition device, and succeeded to escape. Once they had left, the bomb let out a scorching and pungent smell, and as they watched, the reactor turned a pale green. It was infected. The ultimate being has been killed, and the plans of the Osmanite clan have failed… or have they?

The Supreme Being has finally been perished, but the Osmanite’s knew this would happen. They have yet been funding a program on Magna Lope, the greatest black core of the universe. They have exceeded gathering the four main principles of immortality. Once again, they shall wreak havoc amidst the cosmos of the universe. They have accomplished in cloning a life form from the DNA of Osmiron, leader of the Osmanites, and second most powerful being in creation. He is destined to let all live, but him control all, so he can complete his goal… Silver Storm. This is when the powerful stream of life is diverted and drained into one body to make him incapable of death. With the life of everyone in him, he can own all and become the foremost god. Then, when he takes over god’s power, he shall be able to rule all different dimensions, and basically, all existence in itself. But to do this, he needs power. He must defeat the strongest person in the universe, but he cannot and relies on his genetic copy to guide him to his goal. His one weakness is that he holds no power in himself… his source is retrieved from his element. He possesses no spirit, and undoubtedly, no life. He relies on the strength of his fellow enemy to gain his power. His clone though, has been injected with power and great magic. They cannot release him as he will disobey and run rampant. They are waiting…Waiting for the time to be right. Until then they sit in the shadows of Magna Lope.

Character’s info:

Koping Glover:
Ex military strategist
45
Male
Gun
He was one of the military’s finest. He planned the infection of the mechanical supreme one. He commands the elite force. He can also receive the WAI, the World Army Institute, to utilise at any time in any way.

Silph Starr
Student at Benevola
18
Male
Grandfather’s enchanted sword from the Supreme war
He is Brave and witty. He signed up for the military and exceeded until he was under Koping’s control. He refused becoming part of the WAI, and still goes on trying to find his path in life.

Ol Greane.
Student at Benevola
18
Male
Knives and Blades
He is not so courageous, but he is a pretty good fighter. He also signed up for the military, but only to get the love of his girl. He also exceeded and was under Koping’s control.

Jennifer Fraud
Student at Benevola
17
Female
Sharpshooter
She is too young to hold a gun, but the legality of her planet allowed it. She is very experienced and can kill a target 45 miles away. She has done better than both Silph and Ol at the military and is beginning to start a calmer life, when…

Vermont Plaisse
Deputy head of Benevola.
50
Male
N/A
He orders the actions of his students and he manages when they have to fight. He does not play a great role in this war.

The Rain and The Flood
Group of killers
All range from 23-30
All Females
Swords, guns, bows and arrows
This group works for the Osmanites and under their leader’s control, Rainn Flood. Their existence is pitiful and they sometimes divert the plans of the universe against the Osmanites.

Florence Greene
Deputy Prime Minister of Urangia
40
Female
N/A
She is the Deputy prime minister of Urangia, the centre of the planet of Corr. She controls the WAI and her country is mostly under her power. She organises the attacks against the Osmanites and will one day lead Corr to victory.

Background Knowledge: The world is under-organised. Florence and Koping are the strongest wits in Corr and have to recruit anyone that volunteers. They ask students from all over the world to join their forces, as they are desperate. If they don’t have enough soldiers, Corr will be brought to ruin.

Quick observations here:

I havn't read your story yet, but I feel youre shooting yourself in the foot with this pre-story expose. I know its meant to explain things and set a backdrop so readers can understand, but I think it would be a lot more effective if you wove it into your actual narrative.

The same goes for revealing character bio's, Id rather get to meet your characters first time through your story as opposed to a readout of em.

I shall now read your story...

I aggree with Ziggy. I think it'll be much better "framework" for writing your story.

Might be advisable to only include those bio's as an appendix to the main story once its written for reference

I wanna read the story, so far it sounds good